Posted by Baby Val on May 09, 2006 at 18:44 [12.201.62.217]
In Reply to: New story posted by Ty on May 07, 2006 at 23:44
From the plot, I didn't like it. Not into the S/M aspects of AB/DL.
From a literary aspect, you need more paragraphs. Plus spell check better.
Where at just after midnight did he find a car dealership to trade in his car? And what Soap Opera was she watching in the middle of the night?
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